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The moment I told you I know your favorite band
You embraced me and I thought we might be friends
I wonder if you felt my accelerating heart
I wondered if you sensed my brain creating art
Of words out of the emotions you cause
We sink into a conversation and I'm more buzzed
By you than the beer and potato water
Not enough to ask for a daughter
But we both write and like the same sounds
So maybe you're different, maybe you'll stay around

You thought among the bass and the shouts
Nobody will see you walking out
Well, nobody but this little insecure dipshit
Catch up, ask what's up and you tell me to leave it
How can I see you like this and ignore?
Your mask is stained from the blood that pours
So talk about your problems and then talk some more
I won't leave you, even if they call me for war
You tell me about your home and your suicide attempt
You started crying and I told you the party can wait
I reached out and held you for a bit of warmth
Cry as much as you can, for what it's worth
Cry as much as you can, I'll stay until the sun comes up
And after it goes down again if it's not enough
Friend calls, says they need more beer
I say find someone else, I'm busy here
Meanwhile, she dries her eyes
Says it's okay, let's catch up with the guys
We can't find them, you ask me for some chewing gums
I buy them for you and the look you gave me still makes me feel dumb

I thought this was beginning, now it's just another even
Like that American Football song, like it was never meant
I don't know how you felt when I refused
My friend when he called to get more booze
So I could stay with you, but I know I was crying inside
When you told me about your missed suicide
Some say I was only aiming for your pants
But you'd see I'm for real if you'll give the chance
The only reason I didn't keep on holding
Is because I don't touch a girl if I'm not sure of wanting
I went back home, stayed up until about five
Thinking this is some new chapter in our lives
The way you looked at me, the way you talked to me
Like a kilo of energy drinks straight to the arteries
It's something in your voice, in the color of your hair
But you never love someone just because they care
I felt such a release when I finished writing this. I can't remember the last time I felt this after writing something.

I was actually 19 when this whole thing happened but, well, when it comes to love I'm still 16 and just started hgih school.
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Lyricsloveandbooks Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student Writer
"How can I see you like this and ignore?"

Beautiful, I love this release, the emotions had a great impact.
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PatternVSUser Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This did give me a huge release. It's one of my favorites just because of that.
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slipcast-chrysalism Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"But you never love someone just because they care" :heart:
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PatternVSUser Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I loved that line too.
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student Writer
"potato water" Heheh.


Good stuff, but I think it would work better as a prose piece of some kind; I can't see the line breaks or other poetic techniques used/adding to it. 

A bit drastic, perhaps, but IMHumbeO that would make it stand out more. An emotional vignette would be a good place for something like this. 
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PatternVSUser Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This was focused more on the emotional side of things. I am planning on turning it into a prose piece, but I'll write it in a minimalistic, raw style completely different than this.
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student Writer
Fair enough, it is your work.
That'll be interesting to see :3
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AmbushRealityLeader Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
As always, you have a magnificent way with words.
Leaving all the live descriptions in makes the poetry so raw and exposed it lures you in it while reading and takes you through the experience of your emotions and it's amazing.   
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PatternVSUser Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Big thanks!
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, how sweet
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